Comments of chapter undefined of The lightning Descendant

good start . my $0.02: well planned out setting and characters. good pace if development and just the right amount of cliffhangers without being pretentious . my only grumbles would be: seems like there are a lot of loose ends left in the starting town; and the last 3 days (while the thief encounter was fun) seemed quite rushed and just jammed in at the last minute .. just some constructive criticism . :)