Comments of chapter undefined of TEENBEAST (Teen Wolf AU)
TEENBEAST (Teen Wolf AU)
_Avatar0FFury_
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The story is great but I feel like the plot isn't progressing. Nothing really important happens or it's not enough to demonstrate. I think there's a little too much suspense and not enough response.
I also found that it lacks a sense of danger. That is to say that the danger is present, explained, and understandable but only for the characters. The characters live in a supernatural world and it's conscious of things. But we were aware of nothing! We do not see the danger, we are not shown it. I will take the example of the attack on the father of Isaac. I would have preferred to see the father get killed because it would have been more impactful. Basically, its lack of action represents the level of strength of all the characters to get an idea of the danger.
_Avatar0FFury_:I actually agree with this a lot tbh and I don’t know why I didn’t see it before😕 I’m sure it’s due to the longer running story format I’m used to writing but you’re correct. There’s not enough response or breakthroughs. Thanks for this comment, I’ll have to hit the drawing board and see how I can fix it🤝
