DreamThree
Eh feels kinda forced how the sister lied, before she seemed like someone really competent or at least trying and I can’t believe she would be dumb enough to lie about that brother or not.
Please read everything, not only the word FORCED. I think I explained why it felt forced to me( in this case a problem that could be getting solved there and a lot more easily but gets continued because a character acts a certain way that wasn’t shown or at least hinted before, it’s obviously going to feel forced to some when a character that dint mind taking her brothers job for being an idiot and then suddenly he is an idiot again but this time she cares so much for him that she is willing to risk a ton to cover him) if it dint feel forced to you well ok good for you, dosnt mean other people can’t feel it is
Lord_Shiva_:Uhh. I don't think you know the meaning of forced, mate. That's her just putting family before anyone. Even when they are in the wrong.
I dont really care how you write your novel by now. I had some critcism about it and also supported it when people seemed to become ridiculous. Its your story to do what you want. Just dont make this awkwardly go into suicide with the really worsened update schedule. Either continue or tell us if you want to quit it or hiatus for now.
Otra vez un problema con colt?, En serio otra vez con este tipo déjame adivinar la hermana piensa en la propuesta de su hermano que es posible y no presta atención de la advertencia de su padre y se crea un problema más grande por qué se confían de que pueden ganar o posiblemente pueden obligar al MC a hacer a su beneficio, esto me da una sensación de trama china en que debe haber conflicto por qué si no importa si es forzado o no( cómo por ejemplo MC de turno mata a la familia del antagonista de turno solo por qué el mc le miró feo y hay de crea el comienzo del conflicto una estupidez, eso e leído y es horrible) y sobre todo de la manera más aburrido posible y lo más cancerígeno lo alargan a más no poder; pero bueno espero estar equivocado si no bueno una buena historia arruinada, y sobre todo es mi opinión 😒.