Comments of chapter undefined of My Hollywood System
My Hollywood System
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Hello, thanks for the chapter! Regarding the june decisions, I dont think you should yeet June because it doesn't feel right when she is starting a new venture and really need support then Will suddenly abandoning her. Well, that might be my bias of wanting to see other characters growth to be successful and be a better part of themselves after they are interact by the Main Character. I personally do not mind that character have slow growth as long as the pay off is great. However, some comments are right that the presence of June is quite thin in the story because Will's Boon is very OP so there are less chance of her helping him while also leaving quite a big impact. TLDR: might as well finish her arc so don't yeet her and maybe give her an impactful role helping Will when he is in need either in career or emotionally.
I want will to take on Alone in the Dark from Uwe Boll, one of the worst movies ever made. Could be an interesting arc where he will have to surpass himself. Regarding June, and sorry it will be a long text, I will be honest I was waiting until I saw what you were going for with her, but here is my take on why there is such a controversy with the character. It lies in two things: contrast and story. Aside from the Blair witch arc, most appearances from June were negative with her confidence's problems and it contrasted too much with Will the MC who was always positive, so this contrast gave a negative connotation to June. But the biggest problems lies in the story itself, June is a secondary character, she doesn't have enough presence in the story to have her own character arc so suddenly. Will as our reader POV had more interaction with Jeffery and Amanda than June, so it gives more the impression that June is a background character than someone who is a t front stage. The second problem lies in the fact that we already have an MC with his own studio, making his own movies, so why is June going for the same path, it leads back to the problem of contrast, she will be compared to Will since she is going for the same 'role' in the story. And you could make her have problems in making the studio, but then we're going back to the comparison with Will. And most readers are here to read about a character with a system going on his path to success. Hope it helps you, and still love your story and will continue reading it.
