Comments of chapter undefined of My Hollywood System
My Hollywood System
DreamThree
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Since it's a fic that you use to better your writing, here's my opinion on why drama and conflict don't work in this fic : It's not the drama that bothers me, conflict makes a story after all, but your execution is lacking because you didn't build up your story correctly for this kind of drama or difficulty and because of that we go from 0 to 100 miles suddenly. I'm giving you an example of how your story isn't truly built for this. Let's go back to the arc where the system asked him to make his own original big movie. It was sudden, until now he was only doing movies that already existed where he had a template for it, then he must do a blockbuster by himself. A truly logical build-up toward this would have been multiple missions, like the system could have given him the scenario of a bad movie (or a uwe boll movie XD) and asked him to make it a good one (not in terms of views but of critics), or ask him to make a small successful original movie. But instead, it directly asked for a blockbuster. And he still cheated in some way since he used GTA stuff to make his movie. Add to that, that until now the problems have been kinda once and done and easily at that, and that's why this fic isn't truly a fic where you can put drama easily or correctly because you haven't built it for it.
I love your story so far and in my opinion it would be cool to see how you have Will create a horror film with better equipment then what he used for Blair witch project, maybe have him recreate the book IT by Stephen king before turning it into the newer movie's I would love to see how fans would react to it I mean I loved the newer it movies if not it then do the nun or Anabelle or the pet sematary or the poltergeist or saw or the ring they where great movies heck you could even do slasher movies like Halloween or Friday the 13th maybe even the candy man
