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I'm personally a fan of the use of the poem invictus and a wonderful Venezuelan saying, adding some credibility to the main character having studied under the great minds of history. On a whole I like the deeper philosophical intentions behind the book all I hope is that if you haven't already; think of one lesson you want to convey to the reader without ever explicitly stating it, that'll make this fanfiction truly valuable and that's from someone who's read litrally thousands of novels and studied the great philosophers of history, good luck.