User_013
Nice! You're grammar is mostly on point which fortunately, or unfortunately depending on how you want to look at it, makes your fic better than the majority on the site. There are so many different directions you could go from here and from your author's note I can tell you're a pretty shy guy/gal. Remember that this fic is ultimately your own. People can suggest things, criticise you or even downright insult you but at the end of the day, the decision on what direction to go and what to write lies with you. You are the author you know! Looking forward to where this goes next. —AshestoDust