instead of "In the sky above blahblah:" i feel like it would be better if location skips like this were just explained rather than this, the same goes for saying "Aether POV:" it kinda ruins immersion.
The 20 secs later and 40 secs later is weird. Better just do like this ”….”. And the cage scene is a bit confusing to read, uhm, like, I don’t know who’s speaking at that moment and it could be written better so that the readers could understand it better.
Why is it in everyone of these webnovel stories, there's always a 'curvy'?
Male author writing a female character: How can I write this story properly, portraying the characters properly?
Also author: Curvy
So, He came home 30 minutes into her birthday and he is "late" since when? How is that something to be upset about in the first place? it would be different if he got home at 12:30 the next day but he said her birthday was gonna start soon soo
