Comments of chapter undefined of PokeFutas and PokeTraps

Hey Gnar. another good chapter, thanks. There are quite a few grammatical mistakes, unfortunately I can't point them out because I'm using a phone. There are alot of mixed up the pronouns, calling the sister he and the brother she. I suggest you start with trying to get a handle on those, as that would make some of the other mistakes a bit easier to spot. there are also a few parts that were a bit incoherent which I think might be a punctuation problem. I'm not a professional but I'll try and edit the chapter for you so can see the mistakes I was talking about. Good job so far and good luck. Don't drop this yet. Use it as an opportunity to see where your english needs to be improved.