ok story..your just saying the same thing that other writers of fan fics say switch it up a bit... focus on the mc more to much focus on secondary characters..thnx [img=recommend]
Honestly it's starting to get a bit too abstract, it's getting hard to follow what is going on... you're doing a great job but these chapters feel like fillers which don't really add to the story, except maybe to flesh out "the enemies"... but it feels like it's too drawn out
