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Comments of chapter undefined of [BL] Quick transmigration : Destroy the happy endings

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[BL] Quick transmigration : Destroy the happy endings

Lizbreaker1174

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Dragonlady_5991
Dragonlady_5991Lv4Dragonlady_5991

I’m sorry to have to say this but, learn some proper grammar and basic spelling. The story sounds like an intresting concept but is so badly written that it’s unreadable. You used the wrong words several times “server” is not the same as “severe” as one refers to computers and the other means the same as ”extremely”. This is just one of so many extreme errors I lost count. Either learn to write intelligible or hire an editor. My mom teaches third graders and they write better sadly.

1yr
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Lizbreaker1174
Lizbreaker1174AuthorLizbreaker1174

oh! how bad is it really ... working on it.

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TwilightHeat
TwilightHeatLv13TwilightHeat

Sucks that even his girlfriend and best friend were screwing around behind his back.

9mth
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Lizbreaker1174
Lizbreaker1174AuthorLizbreaker1174

Thanks I would try to work spelling

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sans_8354
sans_8354Lv13sans_8354

there are a lot more grammar/spelling mistakes in this chapter but I got bored of commenting on them the story seems interesting so far though

1yr
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Jackie_Bryant_0159
Jackie_Bryant_0159Lv14Jackie_Bryant_0159

You've written an interesting story, so far. It DOES need some editing, which is unfortunate because it's tedious when you have to try and figure out what the Author is trying to convey to the reader. I'm going to stick with it though, because you've caught my attention.

2mth
Your_Loss
Your_LossLv3Your_Loss

There are a few grammar mistakes, as others have commented on, but other than that, this story is really, really interesting already. Can’t wait to read more!!!

7mth
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