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Comments of chapter undefined of Vile Evil Hides Under The Veil

Banana_King
Banana_KingLv15Banana_King

Hey author, I love the novel, but I wanted to point out a weakness in one of your major choices. Reen is one of my favorites, but her absence makes her forgettable to the reader. It's like a long distance relationship. In order for it to work well both parties need to communicate a lot and make time as much as possible. In this instance the reader and Reen have been seperated for so long with so little contact it becomes harder to care and stay invested in the relationship. We don't necessarily need to see her, but the author should continue to communicate her importance by mentioning or weaving her throughout the story whereas here she is just absent for hundreds of chapters without a mention. We hear Eren's inner dialogue all the time, but he rarely ruminates or thinks about Reen (from what we see), despite their initial break-up being so powerful and driving for Eren. We also have only gone to Reen's pov once I think. Just something I wanted to mention. Even just having Eren mention or think about her from time to time shows us he cares about her (whereas now it seems he cares more and more about his own powers and machinations and not at all about Reen). I mean look at how often he thinks about Eliza in comparison or how often others bring her up, she comes up all the time which communicates to the reader that Eren cares about her more, even if in a negative or driving sense. As per the end of this chapter, you've made it seem as if Eren has outgrown Reen, which would be a major disappointment for myself and I think wated potential.

Lord_Maxwell
Lord_MaxwellLv15Lord_Maxwell

Gracias por el Capítulo!![img=update] Thanks for the Chapter!![img=update]

Zuzu15
Zuzu15Lv14Zuzu15

Thank you for the chapter ☺️