Aaron_Chong_6689
I was just glad that you came back, and you ruined everything. You could reveal the past universe and you made allusions to it. This is no longer a story about Black Light. You removed a good system and moved on to some clichéd plot, when gg becomes op and his powers are cut. You ruined my expectations of this story. The only good addition is the extreme planet.
Wait, this is one of those Fanfics where despite basically being a whole new book, you have to read the previous one to understand what tf is going on, who all these names are, and who the MC is. And here I was excited to read a seemingly great book, I hate it when I have to read another for it. This stuff just makes readers put off reading it and eventually giving up due to frustration (at least for me it does).
This chapter doesn't feel like 1st chapter material.. feel like I missed something. Anyways, 250+lbs at 5'6" is definitely into obese territory. And removing the store because it makes someone too op too quickly doesn't fly when you then give them 300+ intelligence and lots of free op skills for no reason. But all of that pales in the face of the truly godawful grammar, and the giant blocs of capitalized system text.