Comments of chapter undefined of The Rebirth of Evelyn Knox

ok, gotta say, while the whole 'video game' theme is not new, this writer already shows great promise. Too often I come across really interesting stories, but no actual writing talent to back it up. Here we have a writer that clearly has some talent, and the plot crafting also shows skill. one of the greatest rules (and most neglected on these sites) is to 'show' instead of 'tell', and here is finally a writer who is at least attempting it. It's still pretty early but I am already intrigued and pleased with this beginning. Well worth all the work you have put into it so far, author! well done!