Comments of chapter undefined of What I've Fished

Moving past the incorrect use of commas instead of periods. I think this chapter could use a spruce up of details. Really raise the mood by adding additional details to the scenes that really showcase the horror. For instance, When I had pulled what I thought to be a fish out of the water, what came up was much more chilling. The severed head of a man came out of the water, landing right in front of me, causing me to puke over into the water due to the nauseous feelings bubbling inside of me. When I looked back up, more severed heads were coming out of the water, and the water began to gain a red tint, the blood flowing into the water, dying it a scarlet red. I felt afraid for my life, and I rushed the boat away from the area of the abandoned island.