Comments of chapter undefined of Danmachi: Outsider's journey
Danmachi: Outsider's journey
futur_hop
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Just a suggestion ,at least in my opinion, avoid too much dreams realm and heroic stuff without action. Otherwise at the end of the chapter it feels like nothing happened and the story does not progress. At least for me the cool things about danmachi are the "status page" and the "dungeon /adventure " the rest are an extra . If the story focus too much on the extra stuff becomes a bit boring at least for me. Anyway mine is only a suggestion you can write what you like more ,after all the novel is yours.... Good luck in any case as usual
Thanks for this chapter. I'm having a bit of trouble linking the story to Danmachi so far. I don't mind having a development like you do, but then you have to have an idea of how the story is progressing and when the story is approaching Babel. If you want to take a lot of time for the details of the hero, which I really like so no worries, you can do flashbacks or show scenes and explanations sprinkled in your future chapters. For example an expedition in the dungeon, and the hero while he reflects thinks of his past. Oh and as a super detective, wouldn't that be Hades in those dreams?