Comments of chapter undefined of A SHINOBI IN PARADISE

Honestly Bro this fic has a lot a potential. The new relationship seemS alittle forced especially when a chapter before he was just starting to get over being rejected. Stick to your orriginal idea of making the girls jealous and avoid them alittle. You dont have to rush right into the action just put it in when it feels right. I also Liked the Character development in past chapters it gave us an idea wHat type of person the protagonIst is. I recomend reading endless path infinite Cosmos if want An example of a good story. Good luck with tHe story.