Comments of chapter undefined of Star wars: New Order(DROPPED)

Dr_Dred

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Austin_BuiceLv15Austin_Buice

It's been good so far just thought that this chapter didnt flow right not sure though could just be me

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BC0Lv4BC0

The last two sentences messed up the flow for me. The double and in the last two sentences to be exact. And the wake up thing seem forced.

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ThanatosGreekGodLv14ThanatosGreekGod

how are two random people supposed to ask for the queen??

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HHKingLv14HHKing

Japanese middle school protagonist syndrome again

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olympaforgedLv4olympaforged

you got the dialogue down in last chapter separate it from the narrative, makes it easy for reading

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Bogdan7Lv5Bogdan7

this seems to be written by a kid....

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Ethereal062Lv14Ethereal062

Why bro so passive? Wish he was more assertive

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SladeOfWolfLv4SladeOfWolf

Thanks

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Slytherin733945Lv4Slytherin733945

awesome read can't wait for the next chapter. 😎👍

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KhorsLv15Khors

👍

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