Comments of chapter undefined of CASSANDRA: The Unfavored Princess
CASSANDRA: The Unfavored Princess
IrisSky
Chapter comments27
Yay! I love your first chapter! It's wonderful! This is EXACTLY the kind of story I love to read! and like I said, there are some parallels to my story too. although now that I've finished the first chapter I can see that it's just a few. **CAUTION BELOW MAY CONTAIN SPOILER*** The only area I recommend you change is this: When you are explaining the magic system, you keep hinting at how there are other elements that can be bended some that are better and more powerful than the original four. Because you brought this up in the first chapter, the reader is now kind of expecting that Cassandra will likely become one of these, especially because we know she has no power. You can leave it like this, it's fine if you want to. But I think it might be better if you introduce this idea later in the book, so that IF Cassandra has a special ability to bend something different or if she is really powerful. It will surprise the readers as much as it surprises Cassandra! All that being said, I've only read your first chapter and have no idea what direction you may take this novel in. so if my advice is helpful feel free to take it, but if it's not, just ignore my words. All in all, I love the story so far and can't wait to read more!!
