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The idea of the story is kind of cool and the political part looks like it's going to be interesting, but the protagonist is pretty pathetic. The protagonist has a very weak personality, doesn't impose himself and just accepts things. Worst of all, as he is unable to assert himself he uses hypnosis to fill this weakness, which makes him even more pathetic. The difference between the two fish is huge, it even made it look like he ate garbage. He has zero ability to argue even though he is a reincarnate. And what he accepts from his mother just because he wants her, again is pathetic. Anyway, I liked the story, but I hated the protagonist. So I'll stop here because I'm just going to be frustrated seeing a character who relies on hypnosis to win over others. I'll wait for other works from your author, I liked your style, I just didn't identify with the type of protagonist you decided to portray.
hnm I think it's cause he is still a child.. he is still barely a year old so his mother doesn't really listen to his opinion and he can't be that assertive since he is much Weaker after all his mother did put him under hypnosis in last Chap.. technically it's the mother that's being too unreasonable.. she was quite Gentle and loving in the beginning but now she is quite mean and easy to lose temper.. maybe cause of pregnancy? either way I hope as he grows he becomes more assertive not dominant necessarily.. his mother becomes Gentle and loving.. nissa becomes like a cheerful Energetic Girl rather than a Haughty brat.. anyways I am sure the author has probably planned something like this or even something better hopefully..
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