Comments of chapter undefined of This Clueless Hero
This Clueless Hero
Disgrace
Chapter comments13
- Maybe change the story's title. It clearly puts off the readers stating that MC is useless abd clueless. - The chapter has no action/no hook. Nothing interesting. - Where did the scene happen? The settings are absent. - There's really no need for food stating and preferences of the people, no one wants to read that. You can say that information about MC in one single line. - They gave the MC a name randomly while the others introduced themselves. Nobody questioned why MC don't remember anything. Why? - They eat and go out, where and why? What exactly is the realm? - MC has no questions, queries or anything. He should've tons of them because he is clueless. Sounds more like a dumb MC rather than clueless. - What exactly is their role in the realm/game or whatever is that? - There's less to none 'useful information' about the demon king. - Most sentences begin with "as if" putting the readers off. Style needs a heavy editing. - A lot of repetition is done in the chapter, most preferably atttempt 3rd person narration. - Only the narration is fine.
