Crimson_Lust
just one question. why switching from third person view to first person view? it felt weird. exept that, great chapter and very detailed. really promissing. you got a fan.
This is not the first time I answer this and it won't be the last. But basically, this is the first glimpse of this universes' creatures, for you see, the 'Narrator' is an actual being, therefore it talked the words that the 'soul' of Diana would hear, at first Diana was narrating her own thoughts, but the moment she died, it turned into the Narrator doing it to her and subsequently the audience which is all of you readers. Some more stuff like that will happen eventually. To get more introduced to the narrator, check out the 'universal lounge' pre-chapters, I think it's either the 2nd or the 3rd one that show off more of the 'Narrator'.