Comments of chapter undefined of Blood Lust An Undying Thirst

you describe their feelings well enough

there were a couple of parts I thought could do with a thesaurus. the story's interesting so far and I'm curious to see how it goes just the writing style is so different from mine I get confused sometimes.

This is the beginning of something awsome!

TT-TT i miss my siblings now

good, all characters seem alive

This first chapter is great, the only thing I would have liked to be delved deeper into, was that arm bite. I want the character to think more heavily about what it meant to have an arm eaten, like what could possibly do that.

honestly , I love how you begin this chapter. But, girl make the paragraph short. When readers see this, they will take it for the boring essays in their school.

This is good first person novel with suspense

Hmm. Suspicious.