Adui
Quite good i like it a lot, decent premise, lazy people tend to be my bane in stories but as long as heâs not âthatâ lazy should be quite enjoyable. However if you Adui ever wish for some ideas for original or unique takes on a diverse amount of stories just send a comment here, got plenty like at minimum i believe around 34 different plot lines. However Iâm quite terrible at writing as in it looks and feels very well mechanical in a sense, not exactly able to bring out that story spirit, If you wish for a example look at the the interstellar Fleet translated story. itâs quite subpar however the basic idea of a being commanding a empire and building it up over time. It is essentially similar to my idea except it would be a mage who eventually became the ruler of his planet and was interested in exploring the stars, by using runic circles they managed to create a FTL drive for their ships. and then expanded. in it there could or wonât be the MC being a transmigrator or could or wonât have a âsystemâ it all depends on many different choices. thereâs much more to it but obviously because this is a comment i canât make it too long. However thatâs just one idea, Iâve got many for either action military, Western Fantasy, Eastern Fantasy, Sci-fi, Horror or any of them combined. Since your such a great writer i decided to share a bit of my idea if your slightly interested. So yeah if your interested you can just comment here otherwise well i believe this can be a pretty good story, maybe not as good as the first but pretty good. So hope you continue it.
Well this system and the world background are nothing new. But the story is good,and until now was better written than most of those similar novels. The mc is pretty good and we don't have too much cliche (like a step sister, or faceslap with some young master or maiden)(i hope we won't have too much later=