Comments of chapter undefined of The Inhabitants
The Inhabitants
Japamoma
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To me, it's a good first chapter, keeping the readers on the mysteries Some grammatical errors but they aren't enough to stop me since in my opinion, you writing style is neat. I've encountered a few stories that made me unable to stay in focus because of the way they wrote Of course, it's nothing to be done because every one of us starts from somewhere but, it's still hard to read it. I tend to come again later to see the development of the story
It's interesting! I noticed that although the text is in past tense, some verbs are in present tense (accompanied the funeral). And you sometimes forget the specifier (covering 'the' area around his eyes; without 'the' slightest scratch). And for the beginning of the text, it should be 'some try their best'; 'in the middle of the road'; 'some laugh'; 'and there are those who fall in the middle of the struggle'