Comments of chapter undefined of Soul Fusion Online
Soul Fusion Online
invayne
Chapter comments14
Just my personal preference but the whole rewind thing...eh. You suddenly went from saying "she quickly moved to her right, spinning her body towards the man and lifted her foot up high into the air. The sword in her hand swept out in front of her all at the same time. too "The sound of wood hitting the ground could be heard as the man looked down at his stomach at the hand which was holding the dagger that was originally in his hands now stabbed deep into his abdomen" This left me so confused. The awkward english paired with this sudden change made me think "what? wheres the rest? how did the dagger get put in his abdomen? her leg is still raised up? You answered these questions with the rewind, but please for the life of me just actually chronologically write out the fight. Don't rewind like this paired with the awkward writing confusing readers and making them wonder did I skip something? Also how in the heck does she manage to grab the dagger mid pass when he is trying to put it in his right hand and then stab it into his abdomen, while her leg is raised up??????????????????????????? like dafug (っ °Д °;)っ
