allshadesgreen
thank you đ
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Thank you for the update and suggestions. I have updated the title. I hope you like it[img=recommend]
you've written very well. Its a good start.
It was a good start! since I have read the previous one... I think you have improved a lot. keep it up!
Don't write in the title "Rewritten version"
Intriguing first chapter
Nicely done..though I suggest to snip some typos and it was close to none. good job!
