Comments of chapter undefined of Trusted Fairytale

I really like the concept of the story, how it goes, how it would go in the next few chapters, and the character development of the MC. There are missing commas and intricate texts in the paragraphs, but that ain't enough to stop me from reading this novel! I advise you to use grammarly and prowritingaid to enhance your chapters.

Nice start it wasn't too fast paced or slow but is it story written in the past or present...?

That's a really nice opening, and I love the pace

Overall the writing is really good and flows well. There are some narrative choices that I am not so convinced about. E.g. the internal conflict Andrew is facing, it can come from a deeper place, not just his sister telling him that he is not happy. May be he sees one of his exes that he had to break up with for work, may be he faces hostile patient parties who do not understand that there was nothing he could do to help the patient, may be he loses out on hanging with his friends because of work. etc. Just something to think about.

There are some typo errors but next please