Comments of chapter undefined of Vampires of Halvor

This story is already off to a great start. From the obvious connection between Ingrid and Wesley at the beginning to the detailed passion displayed by the fighters on both sides of the battle, this tale moves right along. My only suggestion is to make your transitions between POV's slightly smoother. But all in all, great beginning! I'm starting on the next chapter even now!

First chapter is off to a good start, compelling story and just the right cliffhanger to keep readers interested.