Comments of chapter undefined of An Extraordinary Gentleman

You have a lot of tense issues that you need to fix. You run from past to present and back and it throws the reader. Your world is well-imagined, but your characters could stand to be a bit more defined. WHo are these people? What does the boy want? Also, the first half of this paragraph is prologue/expository. Setting up the world. Maybe think about including a break before you get to the actual action of the story to let us know that we're now following the character.