Comments of chapter undefined of Behind the Veil : Vengeful Spirit

Hello, I read through your first 4 chapters and I'm quite pleased. Your world building, storyline and prologue are excellent. Compared to some of the other works I've read, I can tell that you plan and are a good writer. The only criticism that I can give you is that there are times where your syntax and verbs are a little messed up. For example, there should be times where words should be switched around like "forever loner" should be "loner forever" which are common mistakes. There are also times where you switch between present tense verbs and past tense in the same paragraph making the reading seem a little off. However! These are the only issues I had with the text and I found that the rest was very good. Please continue writing because you are definitely getting somewhere with this story! :)

thank you so much.