YourShadowsenpai
So, first things first: Thank you for the chapter. It starts off differently from the usual 'death-by-truck -> meets Godly entity -> reincarnates with wishes' trope, so that's a plus. Please do not feel offended by what I am going to write next, however, dear author, you previously mentioned that your goal is to become a novelist, and I'd bet not just some wishy-washy spill that slushy kind of novelist, but rather one with some degree of professionalism. I also do not know, whether English is your first language or not. Still, if you want to stand out from the masses, how about you start by improving the quality of your work by proofreading it. There is a good amount of mistakes here. It would do you good, if you'd start making it a habit to read over the things you've written a couple of times over the course of, let's say, a day or two. That way, it will be easier for you to spot mistakes and irregularities since you have given your mind enough time to relax in between the read-throughs. If you desperately tunnel-vision onto trying to find mistakes, trust me, you won't find them. Again, this is just a friendly advice and is in no way meant to offend you.