Comments of chapter undefined of (DISCONTINUED)

She could just ask her father to investigate himiko's parents cause for me this is child abuse due to 'villainous' quirk

Currently have a chapter in development. Dont know when ill get around to publishing it but lately I also have another story in developement and wont start publishing it till this story hits the current goal I have set, that way it will keep me motivated! i finally have some ideas for this story so when I have some free time ill get to writing them!

Suggestions for the mental block and stuff: Of course the training, you can use this chance to show the characteristics of the father's quirk and have him explain something scientific about how ice quirks function, concepts, uses, etc. like the tutorial of a videogame; there might also be individual differences and maybe even different types of cold powers, adding that way a new layer of depth that might be unique to your story, but can also be applied to the rest of the show in the headcanon of us readers since it might be intuitive. Show parts that Kasumi lacks with her ice quirk powers, like control, precision, versatility, and how she can use her creativity in a better way to boost other fields such as mobility and defense. Of course, these should not be super advanced or developed since she's still a little child and needs a long time to progress so much, but her father might give some tips that can be interpreted as that. I dunno about direct sparring because, again, she's a child and the fundamentals of both quirks (Kasumi and Icebreaker) are different and it might turn dangerous for the father, although you could use that chance to show just how professional he is by dealing with it while teaching his daughter at the same time, IMO something like this would be better in the future when she's a teenager. I also imagine this training not taking too long or being overloaded, maybe just a soft, general view from her father; Toga might go to the house and have food with the family, she might not reveal her family problems on the table, besides that, I dunno how Toga's plot progresses in the original show, maybe you know so you can guess the possible butterfly effect and different results in the short and long term, also considering Kasumi's personality, I believe she won't just expose her friend out of nowhere, in that regard, after training and stuff, Toga can have a happy meal with Kasumi's family and feel the good family love, unlike in her own house. That is my opinion and suggestion on how the story might develop.

cant wait for more:) the relationship with the mc and himiko is going places if there is a timeskip somewhere...

love the story so far and to me toga is one of the sweetest and kindest before she was forced to be a villainess

Are you alive? Author-San?

Also things like making a block of ice to block let's says an explosion is the worst thing you can do as all of the force is getting absorbed by the flat surface having a triangle or even better a 45 degrees curve this redirects the force and any debris away and over the sheild instead of into it this significantly reduces the amount of force on the ice or sheild making it a lot tougher with the same amount of energy it also makes it a lot harder to break with things like punches as they would have a lot harder time just hitting it and having their fist deflected

This is a really good story with very creative plot progression that doesn't just go born done powers done train done school done I hope that you continue this story as it's really interesting to read and draws the readers in to feel for the characters

Hope you upload soon authour i really enjoyed it

Ah, I hope you can read my comments, sorry for making them too long, and don't forget that in the comment sections, the older ones are below, so you can read them in order and get the full context. Ahhh so embarrassing xD

Also, don't be afraid of being bold and adding impactful events when it comes to quirks and superheroes. In MHA's universe, there is all kind of disasters that can be considered relevant and important but they get mostly forgotten or overshadowed because of how many there are or just the scale of the true calamities. One example of that is Gentle: He was an interesting "villain", but in the context of the story, almost nobody knows who he is or that he even existed, only Midoriya; the public does not know about him, he was the author of little and forgettable situations, in other words, irrelevant. Therefore, I believe you can design your own set of villains and stories for Kasumi, her parents, and even friends like Toga, because as long as they are solved, they won't necessarily make the news, won't be many witnesses, and if there are, mostly ignorant of the whole picture, blending with the thousand of things that happen daily, and won't feel out of place with the plot of the original show, or in other words, its context, so it will make sense and even be fulfilling in our perspective as readers.

It is easy to read and get immersed in your story, it is beautiful, but reading is way different from writing, writing as you do is very hard; maybe things are rough on your end, outside from some suggestions and reactions, I can only wish you good wherever you are, I hope things around you get calm and better. We love your work and are very excited to see what you can do next. Another thing: When it comes to ideas for stories, I look for them in my dreams, so maybe if you get a day just to take care of yourself and rest well at night, you might come up with an idea that is fulfilling. Remember to prepare something to write the general points on what the dream was about, short words and sentences will do, after all, it came from you, so you will naturally understand and remember what those words mean; try not to remember so much the events that happened, but the feelings you had, and focus on that, you'll notice that between imagination and dreams there's a connection. I hope this will help at least a little.

thanks for the update 😊

Cool

I hope you can get through writer's block and reach your goal I'm looking forward to waiting for more chapters. I really like this novel, I hope it keeps adding more chapters.