Comments of chapter undefined of Guardian Spirits

I thought quitting halfway but read it anyways. first off all, the way it is written makes it hard to visualize, and the second mistake is that "you are telling, not showing". I last read these kind of writing style when I was getting my primary education. so you can get my point, it looks amateur and even if the plot is top notch, none will read if they can't even visualize the scene.