Comments of chapter undefined of WHEN DEATH SKIPPED A SOUL : LIFELESS
WHEN DEATH SKIPPED A SOUL : LIFELESS
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Septic_RedLv3Septic_Red
This is an amazing chapter, and he introduced some great type of zombies I haven't seen here. And that girl-zombie, is probably taken as a reference from a movie called Warm Bodies, correct?
David_NeilsenLv1David_Neilsen
I'm going to do you a favor and NOT review this just yet. It really needs work. If you have someone who can help you with editing, you should ask for their help. The grammer is just not worthy of being published yet, and it keeps the reader away from being able to judge the story itself. Watch your past/present tenses, check out your plurals and singulars, you also have a lot of the wrong words in here. Read it outloud and have someone else look it over to help you and you'll be able to whip this baby into shape.