great first chapter! I'm hoping the more you right the more natural it sounds! I have good expectations for this novel, remember dont lose patience, take breaks when you feel tired and go outside, or read more books for some new ideas. anywho I hope you have a good day!đđđ
I have deleted the chapters from the previous version and am making a new one with more originality, on Wattpad, I recommend you read it there as there is more context.
this chapter is too rushed this is happening and that is happening this also is happening. it's like having extra salty condensed soup too much too fast.
