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Comments of chapter undefined of The Star Child Games

Alhalla
AlhallaLv2Alhalla

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stealthcheetah
stealthcheetahLv1stealthcheetah

A few missed commas, but otherwise a good start!

David_Neilsen
David_NeilsenLv1David_Neilsen

Loved it. Not much else to say. You have some typos and it could use a quick once-over from an editor or just another pass from you, but the content is briliant.

calfikydra
calfikydraLv10calfikydra

Liked the first chapter! But i'm also a huge fan of the authors note, haha!