ChanduGod
The descriptions of Du Chan's life in this world could've been done in lesser words, rather than loose sentences with overflowing information throughout the chapter. A four years old kid is worried about his 'motive' to come into the world? (Seriously?) There's no hook in the chapter, I mean leaving a chapter on a mysterious door emergence isn't a hook. We all know MC will open it but what lies beyond could be the hook. The chapter would've been 'completed' in my opinion if it had some more action as a hook, or at least the insight after the MC opened the door. WN readers are mostly accustomed to read in past tense comfortably, I hope the grasp over present tense will be executed decently further.