Comments of chapter undefined of The flower that had never bloomed before
The flower that had never bloomed before
Misaki_Midsaka
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ngl, your writing is good and as the story. I know your writing will improve more in the future. best wishes to you. Keep writing!
Update! Okay, the quality has improved quite a lot. You seem to be struggling with tense but it's glad to see you try so hard. I mean, when my first prose was critiqued, I almost cried and couldn't write for a few days. But you my friend, have at least showed that you have guts. I said it before, I'll say it again, this is much better than the one before. But you have a lot to learn. Read actual novels or light novels (if that's your thing). Good luck and good job.
The plot was good, the writing not so much. I'm not great at sugar-coating so sorry. There were issues, loads of issues. first of all, you don't know the format of writing books. it was the same for me when I started to I feel you. Try reading more books, its the best advice I can give you. You can try reading "on writing by Stephen King"
