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Comments of chapter undefined of The Deity Index System

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The Deity Index System

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readtokilltime
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too many powerful beings showing up early on. barely has even made it to adopt yet he ran into a demon lord and now hes about to run into another op demon. space out your conflicts 😂

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StormEliteVII
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Thank you for your thoughts. The reason I put a little more action into this section of the story is because the next arc will be more about the deities' past and will have more dialogue and world building than action.

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NormL
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I hope this doesn't sound mean, but could you get a proofreader. there are quite a few grammar and spelling mistakes, like mansion being spelt massion, or saying that Watsomn felt a text to his son Luccas. Just little things like that decrease the overall quality of the story, but otherwise I really like where it's going😁.

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