Bukaro
This chapter is great! Hahaha this relieves my stress after writing my own novel. And about the loli chapter? I actually don't hate it. It's just that if the loli chapter becomes the third point of view or Luis. It's a bit unpleasant, but if you make it from the loli's point of view who did it. That would be really fun. Basically if you want to do lecherous chapters, you need to change the pov to heroines to make it more fun.