Comments of chapter undefined of (Abandoned) Reincarnated in DxD as Artoria Pendragon with a system

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Shouldn’t u change the tittle as it’s miss leading as it is Artoria Pendragon herself that was reincarnated in high school dxd not a normal girl reincarnated with the appearance and memory of Artoria Pendragon as what was said in the bio

Much better than before. At least it's not as random as a nefore. Nothing is more random than a R.O.B. after all. Also much more reasonable, the previous system is a tad bit too convenient and all-powerful. All in all good work and hope the story last long.

Plz continue this story as it really is interesting

What if she meets jeanne or le fay or arthur? What if she appears in the Kokaibel arc (is my spelling right) where the Excalibur was forcibly fused and she takes out her own Excalibur?....

Haven't read the scrapped version, but based on this chapter I'd say the grammar was fine, characters seemed good and it's a good start for a story. Need more. =)

Liking your work so far, all i ask is that you don't make the protagonist part of anyone's peerage. Appreciate your work.

please don't make her a slave of Rias . That is the most stupid mistakes all DXD writers do .

Thanks for the chapter ! Hopefully she stays with angels or fallen angels there are too many of Devil fics its numbing my brain Angels and Fallen have much more potential if just reincarnator bothered to put effort into it

Guess I forgot to mention this before but you forgot to change the synopsis.

This is much better than before. The time skip is a bit too much though. Given the circumstances I can only assume that Artoria does have memories of her life but it wasn't truly clear how much. The story was from her PoV so far but no reaction to the supernatural side of the world is rather odd, incredible lacking even, more so when she may have memories of the times she may have been summoned as Servant and as knowledge is given when summoned; to be frank, the difference of how things are from TYPE-MOON to DxD is rather astounding (even if DxD lacks conceptual weapons, spells or abilities of that nature for some reason if you exclude a few Sacred Gears) to not have a opinion or comment about it.

The first chapter was good, I think if you added a little more to her first five years it be interesting, however that's not really a significant problem and the story is still good.

Very Good, i didn't read the first version cause i was waiting for it to have more chapters. I think you should change the description cause it's still the one for the previous version.

is better, but I'm still confused, is it Artoria's soul and only hers that was in the void or did you mix souls again?

So many changes, this is good. More[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]

O! this looks like a good start to a story! why did u drop it though?! u just started!!!

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