Comments of chapter undefined of Vanishing Embers

My main issue with this story is the way Aisha's character development is written. Every twenty or so chapters she has a moment where she reflects upon herself, or situations in general, but no permanent change is ever born from this reflection. While it could 100% be my interpretation of the story, you could still do a much better job showing her development. I would also not recommend the "slow burn" development approach, if that was what you were going for, as it does not fit the rapidly changing nature of the story. Earlier the very gradual change could have worked, but in the recent it kinda feels like the story is jumping from one place to another, so you should write her development in a way that keeps up with it, while still keeping it natural and unforced. (Once again, these things could be attributed to my severe lack of reading comprehension.)