Aries_01
Please stop talking/writing in present tense, you talk about the past so much and yet you only talk with present tense words.
I'm sorry, I'm not really good at it. also this is my first attempt to write a novel, but I will try to do it better for the next chapters.đ and thank you for your feedback and for your time reading It please let me know if there is anything that I still need to change to make it better. đđ