Comments of chapter undefined of Supernatural

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Alright, a few issues already: 1) Clara said "you've been around humans far too long" when Danny says that reading minds without care is rude, and then gets super mad when Danny DOES snoop. Very very hypocritical. 2) The transition to home world felt forced. I don't really think it was needed, and the exposition was... quite boring. 3) Luvina was completely unnecessary. There is no need to have some "evil" part of the planet. They did not need to be described as just "the bad guys" and they don't need to just be "the bad guys." It just rubs me the wrong way, sort of like how everyone HAD to be evil in slytherin except for like, a very small amount, just because... plot? convenience? It just feels wrong.

love the ending, thanks for the great wek

after a long struggle, the battle is fought and won. good work

i am a huge fan of supernatural things, glad to meet a kind. love ittt

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