Comments of chapter undefined of The forbidden fruit

Starting the book with an internal point of view, quite nice! It allows us to immediately relate and understand a character's thoughts and such. If I understand well there are going to be multiple POVs? If so, great job because it's hard to write and I honestly wouldn't be able to do so. Otherwise, great chapter, your grammar is good and the writing so far has been immersive

That's intriguing start and good written...

Wow******w this took me on an amazing journey, a cool and easy ride. I love love love this. Wait! Not done reading. Definitely not! It's on to the next chapter baby

Not bad. And your English is pretty good too.

said every other girl who's had a bad experience 🤦🏻‍♀️🤦🏻‍♀️ lol!