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Comments of chapter undefined of A Possessive Mafia Leader

A Possessive Mafia Leader

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sofyaleblanc
sofyaleblancLv11sofyaleblanc

I dont want to come too harsh since I'm an author too but the way the author delivered the story, it's just too straight forward that makes us boring reading it.. but the content of the book is good.. i love it!

8mth
healthandselflove
healthandselfloveLv11healthandselflove

The grammar was a challenge to picture each character in my mind, but the content is interesting.

3yr
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WinterTimeCrime
WinterTimeCrimeLv10WinterTimeCrime

Interesting way of portraying the story. There's a bit of an information dump at the start, but it was fun to read.

3yr
3
DaoistazSzWL
DaoistazSzWLLv1DaoistazSzWL

good name Hardin like in after we fell movie..

1yr
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DaoistazSzWL
DaoistazSzWLLv1DaoistazSzWL

just remembered the after we fell movie when I read Hardin's name♥️...

1yr
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Harshi_Sharma
Harshi_SharmaLv1Harshi_Sharma

Grammar was tough but I like the plot

2yr
2
novel_lights
novel_lightsLv2novel_lights

Number one, CHECKED!!!

3yr
2
hakwlks
hakwlksLv1hakwlks

nice job

3yr
2
NerdyBookworm_
NerdyBookworm_Lv14NerdyBookworm_

The grammar was making it hard to follow at times. I had to re read to make sure I knew who was talking. It sounds good so far, so I will brush over the grammar for now

2yr
1
spideronyourceilin
spideronyourceilinLv1spideronyourceilin

The grammar is pretty bad, but it seems like a reallly good start to a really good story.

3yr
1
fhgrh_fhgreh
fhgrh_fhgrehLv10fhgrh_fhgreh

See this! I just gifted the story: Lollipop

3yr
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fhgrh_fhgreh
fhgrh_fhgrehLv10fhgrh_fhgreh

See this! I just gifted the story: Lollipop

3yr
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fhgrh_fhgreh
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See this! I just gifted the story: Lollipop

3yr
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TheValQueen
TheValQueenLv4TheValQueen

I think She should have listened it...

3yr
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PlayingWithFire
PlayingWithFireLv15PlayingWithFire

Oooh come on! The grammar ain’t terrible at all. I see worse all the time. If you like perfect grammar go buy a book that has been scrutinised by a publishing house. This is a place for people to free their creativity without being under a publisher’s thumb.

2yr
nia_94
nia_94Lv11nia_94

nice job, author. first chap is interesting!

2yr
tanu_sam
tanu_samLv13tanu_sam

this is too much? May be her father is right

3yr
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