Comments of chapter undefined of SOLDIERs in Marvel's Hogwarts
SOLDIERs in Marvel's Hogwarts
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why bother making a chapter, in which you specifically wrote yourself that cloud views the children, as his own children, meaning Natasha and Yelena as well, are his children. you are already knee-deep in wish fulfillment with Aerith and Tifa oh Hermione too, chill with thinking using your libido. you are obviously trying to write a story not just writing cheap ass smut littered with fictional women you like, so do that. Write a story. outside the unnecessary lemon stuff, its pretty decent, bringing Harry along to fight kree? now that's a fresh take, people just forget Hogwarts character even exists the moment the MC goes into Marvel territory, hell you brought someone from Marvel to H.P verse, that's good. why ruin it? best way to shoot yourself and make all your setup cheap later on? doing Natasha x Cloud. I'm currently trying to write something decent, I can relate to a degree the urge just to do it since its your fic, to hell with other stuff. I'll just pair with whoever I want, its the biggest urge. ask yourself this. Do I want to ruin this story? Now let me tell you this, outside the lemon, its not 100% Tifa and neither is Aerith, but you are near that, its pretty much accurate with their personality, with cloud with sepiroth, you did a good job there maintaining them as accurately as possible. You did a lot of setup for future arcs, which are no doubt hard to plan, and I can see somewhat it will be exciting, Yelena blasting assholes with stupefy? that's cool, Natasha learning magic and uses that to lets say, make hulk dance. Cool. Hell, I am super excited to read about Natasha and Yelena's time at Hogwarts and what their adventure will be, take it how you want it, I took my time and gave you actual feedback. came out as an asshole, ye, you have something potentially really good, Hold your urge and don't ruin it, the moment you add Natasha to the harem you won't stop adding more and it will eventually kill the story. This site has enough trash harem, so make a damn good one, Tifa and Aerith's growth and genuine care for Cloud is what makes your harem leagues better than most because you don't turn them into a fucktoy and a display trophy, they contribute to the story, a lot, and this comes from a guy who fucking hates harem in general.
That was awesome. The thing is...this question is not about Phase 1, which ends after the Second Rewarding War. I thought a lot and a lot about what Phase 2 would be, how I should start, end, and storyline (which I had, most of it), but there was nothing that seemed...interesting or good even. Every time it was centred around Cloud, it became boring. So, while I have time, I am trying to carry the story forward from Natasha's point of view. The girl from Red Room, living everyday life, becoming a magician, maybe a future spy. From her perspective, how the two worlds are changing, magicians and muggles. How SHIELD is changing now that they learned about Hydra and tackled their problem. Her family, her other siblings, her job, and her love life. I am stuck on the love life part. I doubt anyone would take it kindly if Natasha had a girlfriend or a boyfriend altogether. Since Cloud, Tifa and Aerith will be present in most of the chapters (going for once every two chapters). So, the idea of her being part of the harem and yuri scenes seemed right at this moment. There is also the point that Cloud thinks of Natasha as his daughter. To make him change his mind would be a struggle. A lot of back and forth might seem like a good idea too. I loved writing the first phase, and it turned out decent. The problem with that is...it made writing the second one just that much harder. I have different scenarios, but sadly...Cloud can't be the one connecting them. Not without giving his character a complete overhaul. At the end of the day, if it still feels cheap. I would have to move onto another line of thought.
