Comments of chapter undefined of Virtual Reality: World Of War

honestly, it's readable but please do some editing

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"Generic" is the only way to describe this prologue i spoted 3 cliches in the prologue and i get you were trying to be original by changing mages to scholars and clerics/healer to doctors but that seems more mundane instead of fantasy and when i see the 7 kingdoms i can't help but think they are connected to the 7 sins (rulers personality could match or they are being attacked by the sins themselves)

thanks. i try my best. actualy, my english only good at reading, while speaking, listening and writing its so bad. this novel i write using my feeling when i reading. so i dont know if this good enought for other people to read