Chaoscaller
VishalGupta:I agree with that assessment. I never said that the humor needs to come from him. It could come from others like the person who died or the lady. or just a random commentator.
Well, well, well!! Honestly, I loved the great collection of words! The story is set in too serious an atmosphere for my taste, but I love the vocabulary. Descriptions are cool. ( I could visualize those first scenes clearly. Towards the middle, it did get a bit confusing. ) But I think you could tone it down a little, i.e. avoid repetition. For example, about his eyes. The book has great potential. Keep it up! P.S. Ever thought of breaking down the chapters? I've heard many say that they find shorter chapters more easier to read. Personally, I love long chapters, tho.